Reflection on the W in WOVE
When revising my Assignment #4 paper, I first decided to make a change in my title. My original title stated: "Social Media Location Tagging is a Danger to Our Society." For my revision copy, I changed it to: "Danger Ahead: Social Media Location Tagging." I made this change because I felt that it was more inventive and not so straight forward and simple. I wanted to make my readers more intrigued and get their attention right away with my title. I also had a little more fun with my second title, and felt that it would make it easier for my readers to connect with the rest of my paper. Another major change that I made was with all of my paragraph transitions. I wanted to make sure that they all became a little more smooth, were properly ended, and that they introduced the next topic of the following paragraph in a clear manner. One example is in paragraph two of my paper. I added: "One of the main concerns that is evolving with these social media location tagging applications, is that society hasn't figured out a proper way to use them yet." to the beginning of that paragraph so it would have a smoother start and a more clear and concise topic stating from the beginning. I also made sure to begin my paragraphs with my own words and to not just go straight into a quote from another source. I have learned that it is very important to incorporate as much of my own feedback and thoughts as I can, but still stating the truth and having resources to back up my facts and information. The next major revision that I made in my paper was to the end of the fifth paragraph. Originally I had a quote from the CBS News interview with Katie Linendoll, but I felt that it was just a quote that had little substance or importance to my fifth paragraph. It was too repetitive and just reinstated what I had already mentioned earlier in the paragraph. Although I made many other small, but important changes to my revision for Assignment #4, my last major change was to my conclusion. I wanted to go back and answer some of the questions that I asked throughout my paper and put them into my conclusion. One of the questions that I had asked in my paper was if the rapid growth and popularity of Facebook and Twitter has begun to hurt our society. In my conclusion, I answered that question by stating: "The growth of Facebook and Twitter is not hurting our society, but the location features on both of these social media websites are what IS hurting us and creating danger." By doing this, I made my entire purpose of my paper stand-out more, and made yet another valid argument and point to my opinion. Overall, this revision assignment really helped me as a writer, and made me open my eyes to all of the possibilities that one topic and paper can have. There are so many options and directions that a paper can go, and still be successful and worth of an "A".